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When writing, clarity is essential. If writing is unclear, the reader may become confused or frustrated, which may lead them to stop reading altogether. Using ambiguous words, or words that have more than one meaning, without clarification can make writing unclear. Pronouns like “their” or “it” are commonly ambiguous, as the following illustrates: “The project managers report potential risks and suggest approaches according to their guidelines.” What does “their” refer to? The project managers’ guidelines? The guidelines of the approaches? A simple rewording can clarify: “…managers report potential risks and, according to their guidelines, suggest approaches….” 

Disconnected or oddly arranged wording also may cause a lack of clarity. In the following example, watch for the confusion over what took place and where: “The athlete said she and her team mutually agreed to part ways in an online video.” Does the video show the team agreeing to part ways or just the athlete announcing it happened? If the latter, then moving the “video posted” phrase would clarify: “In an online video, the athlete said….” 

Looking carefully for ambiguities and removing them can sharpen your writing — and sharp writing keeps readers reading. For questions, contact Dave Bounds at x2859 (virtual office hours: Tuesday and Thursday, 9-11 a.m.). Happy writing!

All writing has a voice, which is often referred to as “tone.” Word choice and order, sentence and paragraph length and even punctuation are all factors that contribute to someone’s tone.

A tone may be authoritative, conversational, scientific, diplomatic and so on. In these examples, note how all are saying essentially the same thing in varying tones:

• The following documentation presents a full explanation of the incident as requested.
• You’ll find everything that happened below.
• To understand the incident, read on. All details are accounted for.

There are several ways to write the same sentence and just as many ways to convey tone. Which of the above sounds like a professional statement? An informal comment? The answers reveal themselves in the details.

When put together, words like “documentation” and “explanation” give an official tone. Personalized wording like “you’ll find” "read on” convey a confident, possibly casual tone. Wording matters! How does your wording make up your tone? What wording could you change to better suit your intended tone?

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Just as the sentences in a good paragraph connect to create a train of thought, paragraphs themselves should flow together to create the train of thought for whatever it is you are writing. From introduction to body to conclusion, paragraphs are key. “Paragraphing” well is all about moving your reader’s attention smoothly from one paragraph to the next.

Incorporating smooth transitions, or segues, between your paragraphs comes down to two methods. The first method is using key words in the start of the paragraph (or toward the beginning) that shape the reader’s expectations for what comes next. For example: Instead of “Several proposals came through...,” try starting your paragraph with “In the first proposal...” Delegating your discussion items into their own paragraphs not only directs your reader’s attention but organizes your own thoughts.

The paragraph above did this by mentioning two transition methods but only discussing one. The second method is to feature key words in the concluding line of a paragraph to set up what comes next. A paragraph on IT updates might mention “...which brings up implications for cybersecurity,” in the concluding sentence. The next paragraph can then jump right into discussing those implications.

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Writing usually involves a lot of shaping and rearranging sentences. If one sentence is too long, awkwardly worded, or just “off,” it can distract readers. Assessing the way sentences are structured is essential to improving your writing skills.

No matter the sentence, it always come down to the subject and the verb. For example: “She wrote.” Anything outside of this sentence just concerns the details. To expand on the example: “She wrote an assessment of the initial efforts of the new program, which began in FY 2021.” In that sentence, the subject remains “she” and the action remains “wrote.” The rest pertains to what she wrote about. To make this flow better, we could break the sentence in two: “She wrote an assessment of the program. The initial efforts began in FY 2021.”

Which is easier to read? The longer sentence or the two shorter sentences? How would you restructure sentences in your own writing to allow for better flow and focus?

Maintaining a subject/verb can ease the stress that comes with finding places to put the extra details. The subject/verb focus is key to creating compelling sentences.

Contact Dave Bounds at x2859 with any questions. Happy writing!